it was made of gold.With salt water pearl knobs.
The grace and majesty,
of my wonderful instrument.
A $300 object
that was mine to keep.
It was just that amazing,
It had its own box,
with cushion inside,
to of course...keep it warm.
That's what I thought when I was in 4th grade.
It was heavy...of course,
because of all the music it held.
I knew it all,
well except how to play it.
It was my golden treasure.
(Suggestions on editing/ what i should change or add?)
I really like this piece because it makes me feel like it was my own instrument. Just to let you know, "It had its own box, with cushion inside, to of course...keep it warm" the 'to' should be two. The poem is great and on the last line where you write "I knew it all, well except how to play it," to make it flow more, maybe you could write I knew everything, except how to play - other than that, great job! :)
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